tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3401449127185454727.post2740250978320393187..comments2012-12-21T02:22:05.263-08:00Comments on Writing and Movies and Games: The Weight of TruthAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05140097996519952953noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3401449127185454727.post-59933716049986766732012-12-07T10:01:01.378-08:002012-12-07T10:01:01.378-08:00Nice effort!Nice effort!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3401449127185454727.post-26020794984456166872012-12-06T21:43:32.332-08:002012-12-06T21:43:32.332-08:00Nice job, good dialogue, & descriptive without...Nice job, good dialogue, & descriptive without being over done. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06384011631491805757noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3401449127185454727.post-610808550146690522012-12-06T20:14:45.538-08:002012-12-06T20:14:45.538-08:00I liked this. Well written and descriptive without...I liked this. Well written and descriptive without being overwrought. Makes me want to know what he was fighting against and why. You also did a good job of capturing his emotional state through your descriptions instead of just saying, "he felt like shit." Show, don't tell.<br /><br />Nicely done.Tomhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00735787117473910397noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3401449127185454727.post-18281972796084541912012-12-06T20:13:32.608-08:002012-12-06T20:13:32.608-08:00Good job. The dialogue was really smooth and natur...Good job. The dialogue was really smooth and natural.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00443551234137975132noreply@blogger.com